Last winter,
you took me in.
Best friends, you called it.
Forever.
So I, of
course, could not object.
We bought
friendship necklaces and I thought they were dumb,
but I wore
mine all the time because I never had one before.
We gossiped,
we shopped, and we laughed
though we
never really communicated.
You led and I
followed
but I, of
course, could not mind.
We were still
wearing our necklaces, though,
and that was good
enough.
But I
realized my necklace became a leash one day
and when I try
to escape,
you hold me
back because you said forever
and I, of
course, cannot say anything.
I am choking,
helpless,
and all I want
is for you to ask me how I’ve been for once
but you lead,
I follow –
and you, of
course, would never care anyways.
The switch to present tense in stanza three is wonderful--a great (and hopefully concious) choice with the "cannot."
ReplyDeleteThis is a good poem.
I appreciate the use of italics to substitute for the "" for dialogue. The extra punctuation can sometimes get in the way.
I think this is great! I love how you include "I, of course" throughout the poem, however you end with "and you, of course." This is great! Keep these nice poems going!
ReplyDeleteThe tense change was intentional! I was a little worried no one would pick up on that.
ReplyDeleteThanks to both of you :)
Agree with both of them^^
ReplyDeleteLove the leash part (: